Development by: Effect.
Written by: Wang Zi Juan, 0503.
Topic: Stephen going home.
Title: “Stephen is going home to his country.
Brainstorming: Nobody teach us – we will miss him – will be poor at oral English and writing – fail the exam – the leaders will be sad.
Plan outline:
[C] Stephen – home – country – consequences.
[E1] Nobody teach us.
[E2] We will be poor at oral / written English.
[E3] Fail the exam.
[E4] Miss him.
[E5] Leaders sad.
[CS] Therefore, terrible.
Paragraph Text:
[C] When Stephen goes home to his country, there are many consequences in the lives of his students.
[E1] If he is going home to his country, there will be no suitable teacher to teach us, as he is a very kind teacher.
[E2] Every student will become poor at written English, and poor at oral English, as there is no other teacher to teach us.
[E3] At the end of this term, maybe some students will fail the exam, and this will make everyone cry.
[E4] We will miss him very much, as he taught us for almost two years; we liked him, and will never forget our times together.
[E5] The leaders will be very sad, when they see many students failing the exams.
[CS] If Stephen is going back to his country, this will be bad for many students; we don’t want him to go back, for at least two more years!
Development by: Effect.
Written by: Feng Ya Xin, 0501.
Topic: SVW leaves. Zhi Da.
Title: “What will happen when Stephen leaves Zhi Da.”
Brainstorming: Sad – less home work – more free time – miss him – no teacher – English level decreases.
Plan outline:
[C] SVW – go home.
[E1] Sad, miss him.
[E2] English level decrease.
[E3] No foreign teacher.
[E4] Less home work.
[E5] More free time.
[CS] Hope – return.
Paragraph Text:
[C] Stephen will go home, because his father is sick.
[E1] This news makes us very sad, and we shall miss him.
[E2] Our English level will “go to the dogs”–that is, it will become worse and worse, if we don’t study hard.
[E3] We will have no more foreign teacher, because there are not enough foreign teachers in Urumqi.
[E4] We will have less writing home work; we will have more time to do other home works.
[E5] If we have a new foreign teacher, we will need to spend time getting to know him; if Stephen remains with us in Zhi Da, we can use the time to have many “free talks”.
[CS] We hope Stephen will return as soon as possible!
Development by: Effect.
Written by: Wang Ai Ying, 0507.
Topic: What will happen, if we do not have enough money.
Title: “What will happen, if we do not have enough money.”
Brainstorming: Hungry – sad – cold – dirty – no friends – must leave college – no choices – no power.
Plan outline:
[C] No money – terrible.
[E1] Cold and hungry.
[E2] No choices, no power.
[E3] Dirty.
[E4] Must leave college.
[E5] No friends, sad.
[CS] Therefore – poor – bad!
Paragraph Text:
[C] It is a terrible thing to not have money.
[E1] If you do not have enough money, you are cold in winter; if your parents do not send you cash, you are always hungry.
[E2] You will have no choices in your life, and no power to make any decisions.
[E3] You cannot wash, and you will become dirty, so that you will feel uncomfortable.
[E4] Since you cannot pay the tuition, you will have to leave college.
[E5] You will have no friends, as the other students will think you are begging; this will make you sad, as you are alone.
[CS] It is therefore terrible to not have enough money, as it makes your life very difficult!
Development by: Effect.
Written by: Luo Xian, 0505.
Topic: Eating too much.
Title: “What will happen if you eat too much food.”
Brainstorming: Fat – sick – lose friends – spend money – stomach ache – move slowly – depressed – psychological problems – lose job.
Plan outline:
[C] Eat too much – bad thing.
[E1] Become fat – move slowly.
[E2] Physical illness – stomach ache.
[E3] Psychological – depressed.
[E4] Spend money.
[E5] Lose job, friends.
[CS] Summary – warning!
Paragraph Text:
[C] If you eat too much food, then many bad things will happen to you.
[E1] You will become very fat; this means you will move more slowly.
[E2] You will suffer physical sickness, such as stomach ache.
[E3] Psychological problems, such as depression, will trouble you.
[E4] Since you are eating too much, you will spend a lot of money.
[E5] Finally, you will lose both your job, as well as your friends.
[CS] We can see from the above, that eating too much food is bad for us; we should therefore eat less food, or we will grow old before our time!
Development by: Effect.
Written by: Yin Xiao Hong, 0509.
Topic: Feelings, if no train home.
Title: “What we will feel, if there is no train for us to go home.”
Brainstorming: Terrible – stay in school – have a part-time job – go to other’s home – travel.
Plan outline:
[C] No train to go home.
[E1] Terrible.
[E2] Stay in school.
[E3] Have a part-time job.
[E4] Go to other’s home.
[E5] Travel.
[CS] Imaginary – will not happen.
Paragraph Text:
[C] What if there was no train for us to go home on for the holidays?
[E1] How terrible everything would be, if such a thing happened!
[E2] We would have to stay inside the school, and perhaps study some more.
[E3] Some of us would find a part-time job, so as to make some more money.
[E4] Maybe we would go to another student’s home, to have a “special” vacation.
[E5] If I had some money, I would travel to some famous places and some scenic spots; I think that would be a more meaningful thing to do, rather than sulk in the school.
[CS] All of these ideas are just imaginations, as I think nothing like this would happen.
Development by: Effect.
Written by: Wang Ai Ying, 0507.
Topic: What happens when we catch cold.
Title: “What happens when we catch cold.”
Brainstorming: Sneeze – tired – fever – dizzy – become cold – head-ache – lose appetite – cough – stay in bed – do not go to class.
Plan outline:
[C] Catch cold – bad – happen.
[E1] Cough – sneeze.
[E2] Fever – also, become cold.
[E3] Dizzy – head-ache.
[E4] Tired – lose appetite.
[E5] Stay in bed – don’t go to class.
[CS] Cold, bad – therefore, healthy!
Paragraph Text:
[C] When we catch a cold, it is a very bad thing.
[E1] All day and all night, we will cough and sneeze.
[E2] Sometimes we are hot with fever; we become cold when our quilt falls off.
[E3] We are dizzy, and have a bad head-ache, so we cannot think clearly.
[E4] We are not only tired; we have lost our appetite.
[E5] All day long, we stay in our bed; this means we cannot go to class, so we “fall behind” the other students.
[CS] Having a cold is a really bad thing, and something we should avoid; we should therefore try to stay healthy, by doing more exercise each day!
Development by: Effect.
Written by: Yuan Jiang Chun, 0503.
Topic: Changes in the weather.
Title: “Changes in the November weather.”
Brainstorming: More colds – more clothes / darker clothes – hat / scarf – umbrellas – boots / short dresses – leaves fall down.
Plan outline:
[C] Weather – changes – consequences.
[E1] More colds.
[E2] More clothes – darker clothes.
[E3] Boots / short dresses.
[E4] Hats / scarves.
[E5] Umbrellas.
[CS] Therefore, be careful!
Paragraph Text:
[C] When the weather in Urumqi changes each November, there are many consequences in the lives of the people.
[E1] Many people catch cold, especially old people.
[E2] People wear more clothes, in order to keep warm; they choose dark clothes, so that others cannot see the mud on their trouser legs.
[E3] Many women in their twenties like to wear long boots and short dresses, in order to look more beautiful.
[E4] Many people begin to wear a scarf and a hat, in order to protect their neck and ears.
[E5] Some people also take an umbrella when they go outside, in case it rains.
[CS] The changes in the seasons are a sometimes dangerous time, as the weather is very changeable; therefore, we must all be very careful!